VN Ren'Py My Italian Slut Wife [v0.1] [HornyDogStudio]

[HornyDogStudio]

Hey guys! Wow, I wasn't expecting such a good reception, thank you so much for that! The "Shakespear" jokes are killing me!
It's my first project, it's all new to me. I don't know how to code, I'm still learning how to use Daz, and English isn't even my first language so there'll be a learning curve in the quality of the product for sure, but I'm already doing my best to delivery something made with passion and care...
As I'm new to this, all the feedback is welcomed, and I already have a small list of changes for the next update, for starters, I'll correct the default name of the wife to "Raffaella" (I also apologize for the gross mistake), and there'll be the option to rename her.
For the next update, a new mechanic will be introduced to enhance the immersion in the story. To be clear, I envision this game being played a lot inside the MCs mind, this is why it's 1st person, so this new mechanic will enhance this feeling of connection with the thoughts of the MC. There'll be some choices, but those choices will mostly change how MC interacts with the other characters and unlock bonus content, rather than forking the story. That is my plan for now.
Anyway, thank you so much for the warm reception, it really is a good boost in motivation! (I have a demanding career IRL, and this is a personal project, so it's hard to have the energy to work outside work something, I'm sure you all understand what I'm saying... )

 

[purple111]

Supposedly because there are a few things to maximize that enjoyment of hardcore NTR that might not be featured in the game due to the author's personal kinks, hence he is prompting the accusations of "this is a lame hardcore NTR".

For example, if the protagonist enjoys his wife getting fucked at all you are essentially keeping it from being the hardest NTR.

or you can look at it like the MC is questioning themselves and their feelings and confused about them. and the question in hismind is "Is NTR avoidable?"

or its this:

 

[JIE^_^]

“In general, I will wait at least 3 months to play cuck-game, after all, there is too little content, and I always can’t get enough at once.”

“After all, there’s a good chance that the production team will abandon these kinds of games

 

[Trasher2018]

Its solid but very short and pure kinetic - you dont even get a fake choice to give the MC at least some (false) feeling of agency.

And tbh the "friends" are horrible - that is not even close to friendly banter between friends - why is the MC friends with the main douche? Only because he is rich?

It would be better if they would first greet him like real friends and then act all horny and surprised about the hot wife. Even if its would be just acting to lure the MC in (what ever is planned for the story).

Currently its the basic trope of useless MC getting steamrolled from second 1 onwards.

 

[atrebor68]

Ok:
Rafaela name doesn't exists in Italy, it's RAFFAELLA;

"Rafaela" is not really a typical Italian name. Missing an "l" and an "f" there, should be Raffaella. Like Raffaella Carrà (who was blonde...).

DIGLIELO!

 

[Alea iacta est]

Plot at the first, looks very very simple and dull.. but it is not necessarily a bad thing.. let's see how it evolves!

The pool scene looked almost surreal.. but I guess is what the dev wanted to archive.

I like the idea of the icons top left/right that gives a different point of view to the scene.... good one

 

[siath70]

Hey guys! Wow, I wasn't expecting such a good reception, thank you so much for that! The "Shakespear" jokes are killing me!
It's my first project, it's all new to me. I don't know how to code, I'm still learning how to use Daz, and English isn't even my first language so there'll be a learning curve in the quality of the product for sure, but I'm already doing my best to delivery something made with passion and care...
As I'm new to this, all the feedback is welcomed, and I already have a small list of changes for the next update, for starters, I'll correct the default name of the wife to "Raffaella" (I also apologize for the gross mistake), and there'll be the option to rename her.
For the next update, a new mechanic will be introduced to enhance the immersion in the story. To be clear, I envision this game being played a lot inside the MCs mind, this is why it's 1st person, so this new mechanic will enhance this feeling of connection with the thoughts of the MC. There'll be some choices, but those choices will mostly change how MC interacts with the other characters and unlock bonus content, rather than forking the story. That is my plan for now.
Anyway, thank you so much for the warm reception, it really is a good boost in motivation! (I have a demanding career IRL, and this is a personal project, so it's hard to have the energy to work outside work something, I'm sure you all understand what I'm saying... )

Here is my opinion, since you actually listen unlike some other devs.

Let the reader have some control, like being able to stop things even if only for a short time.

His wife went from sweet and innocent to full on slut in 5 seconds. What's there to see, you know she's going to fuck every dude there no matter what the husband wants.

Maybe some choices that end the story early, like telling her they were going after the pool thing. Ends the story as they leave, gives a reader a chance to see an end where they have control.

You don't have to branch paths, but the MC stopping things that happen for the time being isn't a bad thing. Maybe skipping a sex scene and the MC and wife have a talk about it and it slows her down some. Add some tension, don't give false choices make them mean something even if it just slows her down or skips a sex scene.

Honestly, some people would play it and skip all the sex scenes just to see that ending, where the MC and wife go home back to their normal life. Kind of a branch and boring as hell, but it also allows the reader to skip certain guys if they want and fuck the others.

A cheating element might be a nice add too, where she cheats on the MC, but again the reader has control over what type of cheating.

I guess what it all boils down to is readers like options, tell your story how you want but inject some options for skipping some of the sex, packing up and leaving, or even the MC getting on to his wife for being to slutty and making her calm down some.

Right now the MC is pretty much full on cuck, has lost control of his wife and she won't listen to him.

It would have been better if she would have been a bit more shy at the start. Then you have a story where the guys are making moves the MC doesn't like and corrupting her along the way.

I for one wanted a choice several time to shut down what was happening and let the wife know I wasn't happy. At the end of the pool thing if I had the option to go to our room or leave and go home. I would have went home, then came back and went to the room. It's the control that allows me to go on with the story, I could have ended it but now let's see what happens when I go to our room...

The story as it stands right now is all but done in my eyes. She a huge slut the MC unleashed as he had no idea. She might as well told those guys hello, stripped and fucked them all right there by the pool and call the story done.
It would be better to ease into it some and give some options to stop sex scenes, I guess a pure route if you want. Where she teases but the MC keeps her in check.

Of course the final choice is yours, it's your story.
Write it how you want, but always take into consideration what your readers are saying. Some will like this type of story, right to the sex, others will want an actual story, and other will want choices to play how they want. Blend these together.

As I said before, love the renders. The story right now, not so much (feels too fast paced to me).
But, with all I have said here you do your thing how you want, always be true to yourself and your vision. Take what people say and use what you like and ignore the rest.

 

[HornyDogStudio]

This would have been a bit better if she would have arr

Here is my opinion, since you actually listen unlike some other devs.

Let the reader have some control, like being able to stop things even if only for a short time.

His wife went from sweet and innocent to full on slut in 5 seconds. What's there to see, you know she's going to fuck every dude there no matter what the husband wants.

Maybe some choices that end the story early, like telling her they were going after the pool thing. Ends the story as they leave, gives a reader a chance to see an end where they have control.

You don't have to branch paths, but the MC stopping things that happen for the time being isn't a bad thing. Maybe skipping a sex scene and the MC and wife have a talk about it and it slows her down some. Add some tension, don't give false choices make them mean something even if it just slows her down or skips a sex scene.

Honestly, some people would play it and skip all the sex scenes just to see that ending, where the MC and wife go home back to their normal life. Kind of a branch and boring as hell, but it also allows the reader to skip certain guys if they want and fuck the others.

A cheating element might be a nice add too, where she cheats on the MC, but again the reader has control over what type of cheating.

I guess what it all boils down to is readers like options, tell your story how you want but inject some options for skipping some of the sex, packing up and leaving, or even the MC getting on to his wife for being to slutty and making her calm down some.

Right now the MC is pretty much full on cuck, has lost control of his wife and she won't listen to him.

It would have been better if she would have been a bit more shy at the start. Then you have a story where the guys are making moves the MC doesn't like and corrupting her along the way.

I for one wanted a choice several time to shut down what was happening and let the wife know I wasn't happy. At the end of the pool thing if I had the option to go to our room or leave and go home. I would have went home, then came back and went to the room. It's the control that allows me to go on with the story, I could have ended it but now let's see what happens when I go to our room...

The story as it stands right now is all but done in my eyes. She a huge slut the MC unleashed as he had no idea. She might as well told those guys hello, stripped and fucked them all right there by the pool and call the story done.
It would be better to ease into it some and give some options to stop sex scenes, I guess a pure route if you want. Where she teases but the MC keeps her in check.

Of course the final choice is yours, it's your story.
Write it how you want, but always take into consideration what your readers are saying. Some will like this type of story, right to the sex, others will want an actual story, and other will want choices to play how they want. Blend these together.

As I said before, love the renders. The story right now, not so much (feels too fast paced to me).
But, with all I have said here you do your thing how you want, always be true to yourself and your vision. Take what people say and use what you like and ignore the rest.

Thank you for your honest and well-thought opinion! You made some very good points, and I will certainly take them in consideration for the next release. It's very good to get good insights earlier, as it gives me the chance to fix the course if necessary...

 

[siath70]

Thank you for your honest and well-thought opinion! You made some very good points, and I will certainly take them in consideration for the next release. It's very good to get good insights earlier, as it gives me the chance to fix the course if necessary...

Thanks for the reply and not being upset about suggestions.

If you want help, I can do an English check on the script for you. Just contact me by DM and I'll give you my email. You can send me your script and I'll check it for errors and send it back.
English is my only language, but I'm an author/editor, not professional or anything. I just do it for my friends and people who publish books through me.
Also been helping another dev on their project with editing.

 

[Robert Paulson]

I remember reading a story on literotica with the same premise. Always thought more people should adapt stories into vns. Best of luck.

 

[atrebor68]

If the wife Is REALLY italian, put some bad words in italian! And remember, for an italian wife all others women are "troie" (sluts), and ita wives don't fuck black men or hispanic.

 

[Ozygator]

will the wife cheat or it's consensual?

She'll cheat and say it was the husbands idea. She likes the idea of fucking the dudes 'friends', and has convinced him that its his idea and he will like it too.

Since he has zero backbone he'll cave and get offon his gorgeous wife getting fucked, like a live porn show. Except its his asshole friends who get the prize and make him look like the cuck he is.

 

[HornyDogStudio]

If the wife Is REALLY italian, put some bad words in italian! And remember, for an italian wife all others women are "troie" (sluts), and ita wives don't fuck black men or hispanic.

Although I'm not opposed to interracial, that is not, and will never be, a theme in this particular project.
Also, thank you for the suggestion to use some Italian words for her, will be done! (if you have suggestions of some common expressions or slanders, please let me know!)

 

[Ozygator]

This game can be really great if it'd give an exhibitionism focused route, no actual ntr/nts involved (no third party penetration on her, basically), while the couple sex intensifies and get more and more exposed. I think it'd fucking great.
This intro was promising. Good luck!

I agree that would be a great route, and throw in exhibitionism where the MC and wife fuck in front of his friends and she keeps the hard stance that the friends can look but not touch. Would seem to hit the same story themes in this first release but keep other cocks away from her.

But that's not the story line unfortunately even though it would be a good one about a beta maybe finally growing a spine and a wife really wanting to tease and get turned on by showing herself but actually still keep her vows and integrity to her husband.

This female is gorgeous, would love to see her not in a cuck story.

 

[Freedom9555]

Nice start of the game, the wife got corrupted pretty fast.
Best thing was her teasing so she could were the swimsuit.
It would be interesting if this would turn more into a cheating and corruption game.
But it looks like it goes more into a cuckold game.

 

[siath70]

I agree that would be a great route, and throw in exhibitionism where the MC and wife fuck in front of his friends and she keeps the hard stance that the friends can look but not touch. Would seem to hit the same story themes in this first release but keep other cocks away from her.

But that's not the story line unfortunately even though it would be a good one about a beta maybe finally growing a spine and a wife really wanting to tease and get turned on by showing herself but actually still keep her vows and integrity to her husband.

This female is gorgeous, would love to see her not in a cuck story.

There are so many stories where the MC just follows along with the wife.

It would be refreshing to see one where the MC actually takes control and stands up and put his wife in her place after what happened at the pool.

Honestly, I would rewrite it a bit, give some options to give the MC some control and then ramp his control up. While leaving a cheating/NTR path open as an option.

Nice start of the game, the wife got corrupted pretty fast.
Best thing was her teasing so she could were the swimsuit.
It would be interesting if this would turn more into a cheating and corruption game.
But it looks like it goes more into a cuckold game.

Yup super fast, it needs slowed way down.

Even if in the next chapter the MC grows a pair and tells her to stop and makes her cover up more. That he feels things have gotten out of hand and it's not what he wants. Just to slow the story down some.

 

[Zanmori]

I agree that would be a great route, and throw in exhibitionism where the MC and wife fuck in front of his friends and she keeps the hard stance that the friends can look but not touch. Would seem to hit the same story themes in this first release but keep other cocks away from her.

But that's not the story line unfortunately even though it would be a good one about a beta maybe finally growing a spine and a wife really wanting to tease and get turned on by showing herself but actually still keep her vows and integrity to her husband.

This female is gorgeous, would love to see her not in a cuck story.

I think it could be more muddled than that. As I said, I only hard excluded penetrations, not touching. So, it could be very teasing, for some cheating, but never going over THAT line. In this sense, for exemple, instead of transforming MC into a domineering chad, instead he could just learn to surf the wave. This route would probably be more light hearted, but with a lot of teasing and tension, and a lot of participation of the guys. The agency could be more with Raffaella, while she uses teasing and seduction to keep control, while MC learns to enforce it and go along, *subtly vetoing with her* when things are to go completely out of control. For this, the story doesn't need to change the way it is, it's just not going over the fine line. As I said before, an exhibitionism focused route. Because, the exhibitionism already in the game is great!
And yeah, the renders are really good and her design is beautiful.

 

[purple111]

HornyDogStudio Hey, since you are open to suggestions (usually i don't add them since i don't want to change Author's vision or motivation) here are a few that might work assuming you want to go down this route, Instead of the wife just throwing herself at the friends to "tease" them on behalf of the husband, since all of them seem to have different personalities it could come out as a competition like scenario:

1. This would give the MC some agency that others seem to be asking for I.e. since they could take part in any of the competition checks themselves and not be left-out.
2. Each friend rival might have a different "flavor" of interaction, like the rich friend might want to buy stuff or impress with his money while the other take different approaches including the MC who might even have an edge to start with.
3. There could be a situation where the MC has to make the "least worst" (or worst best?! if you think about the genre ) and then try to keep things under control​

I am not suggesting some kinda score system for each NPC, you could just do it on an event to event bases where its appropriate to keep things from branching too much but still have variations to a degree, but if you want a score system i think it was be much more interesting to have a "control/liberation" style system that could have some push pull between the MC and Wife, this would lead to more "agency" to both characters. I do understand that you probably have a narrative direction just wanted to add some things that might add to it without altering it to much.

Also i think you need to adjust the pacing a little bit, the meeting for the first time scene was fun but i think its best to slow things down a bit and develop the interaction a little more before the all out string bikini scene.

 

[Domdeyso]

What is NTS never heard this term.

 

[MayJames]

The comment alone " If you want poetry, go read Shakespeare. " made my day ...ROFL !
Ill give it a try...already kools intriguing.